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Dark Assasion Zero
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Hello im going to write the preview of my Fan Fic here and tell me what you think and you can make suggestions if i should change the story line(trust me i wont be angry).

The Devil\'s Wanderer

This is set in the day were demons were real. Believe it or not these demons were not dangorous but peaceful. All that changed when the humans acting out of greed and hatred attacked the demon colonies to steal gold and destroy. The humans captured the remaining demons and sold them off as slaves. They thought they had captured every demon except one, a little baby demon not even grown up to have horns, was floating down a river in a basket made of wood. What had happened was the mother seing the attackers rushed to run away but tripped and dropped her baby in the water. She was later killed by the humans. So he floated along peacefully until caught by a rock and was stuck in place. The stream was in the middle of the forest which was empty except for a little village deep in the forest. This village was filled with humans. It happened to be that a middle aged woman went out for a stroll to go apple picking, her name was Cindy. She wandered to the river to get a drink when she notice a cradle in the river stuck by some rocks. \"What in the world?\" Cindy said as she walked towards it she looked in it and was filled with shock and delight. She grabbed the cradle and rushed home to her husbend Adam. \"What is it Cindy why are you so excited and whats in that cradle?\" Adam said.\"You arn\'t going to believe this.\" Cindy said as she removed the bundle to reveil a baby boy.



So what do you think thats the intro to the book im going to make, tell me how you like it.

[Edited on 3-10-2003 by Dark Assasion Zero]


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Not bad, nut how does he grow up and they dont notice hes a Demon, or do they, and accept him (PM m the answer to my question)


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When i get a chance i will write my next part( I have school and homework).


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Sorry for double posting

Here is Ch.1

10 years from that faithful event, the boy has grown up. The parents Adam and Cindy have found out he is a demon but they still loved him and he loved them back. Beside his short horns he looks like a normal person. The only people who know he is a demon are his parents Adam and Cindy everyone else in the town thinks he is a regular boy with horns caused by a birth defect. So the boy continued his life like a normal kid, his name was Rei. So as life passed Rei got stronger, faster, raised his stealth, and got smarter then all the other kids( demons naturally posses strength stronger then humans). \"Rei wake up!\" Cindy said. \"Okay ma!\" Rei said as he got dressed. When he was finished he walked down the stairs and past the hall of swords hung up on the wall ( his father was a warrior) and got to the kitchen.\"Good morning!\" said Rei, \"Good Morning!\" said his mom and dad. After breakfast (Rei ate his share in one bite) Rei had to go to school. \"AWWWWW do i have to?\" said Rei, \"Yes you have to or no playing with your friends.\"said Cindy. \"Shucks.\" Rei said as he wondered to school. He couldnt place it but it felt like millions of people were watching him. People seemed on edge when next to him too which was odd because people liked him and were use to him. The school was the same too. Everyone tried to avoid him. He was glad he could get home. It was nightime when he got home. \"Hello son\" Cindy said \"How was your day?\". \"Weird you see......\" Rei said but was cut short by a banging on the door. \"I wonder who could that be?\" Adam said as he opened the door. Suddenly a mob of people rushed in grabbed Adam and Cindy, then held Rei down and had a pitch fork over his chest. \"Whats going on here!\" Adam said. \"Shut up\" A soldier said as he walked in \"by the order of the king all demons by law must be captured or killed but in this case killed\". \"What you cant do ARGGH!\"Adam was slain in a single blow. \"Adam!\"Cindy said, \"Rei run, run as far way as you can!\" She was silenced by one swipe of a sword. \"MOTHER, FATHER!Rei said. Suddenly anger of a true demon burned in his eyes and he brimmed with energy. He broke free of the grip and grabbed the pitchfork and swirling around killed the people around him. Then he met the soldier face-to-face and killed him in one blow and suddenly as it came it was gone. His eyes returned to normal and he wasnt brimming with energy anymore. People were rushing inside so Rei quickly grabbed the fallen bodies of his mother and father and ran away into the darkness, and to anwser his tears it started to rain. Rei found a dry spot to bury his parents and placed flowers on the graves. \"I swear that i will wipe out all humans for what they did to you, you were the greatest humans in the world and they killed you they will pay!\"Rei said as he walked off to the town of
Geng-Goong the biggest demon slave town in the world.


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Very good, i like it.


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Thanks COMING SOON CH.2


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I hope your other chapters will be longer than one paragraph. It doesn\'t even fill up the screen on 800x600 settings. But good start.


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