I asked doc to do this he said ya.
part1
New york:the vult
Sir the sute its starting to....move! said a man with no name.BUT HOW?!THE SONIC GUNS SHOULD KEEP IT DOORMENT!said some one else.this is just....SMASHHHH.
Peter parker was not like you or me for one he has spider-powers.I hate days like this i always feel like some thing is going to happen.At that moment peters spider-sence gose off.A car was flying right at him he douged itand looked up there was venom and carnageHe looked quick and put his costume on and then TOXIN JUMPS OUT OFF THE AIR it was spidey and toxen vs venom and carnage....END OF PART ONE tell me what you think and it is boring cause my editer did not let me give all the details.

For gods sake Axl, LEARN HOW TO TYPE. Especially if you\'re writing a story or whatever the hell you\'re doing.

good job bro. but work on your editing:)

This was how it was typed for me my editer told me i HAD TO WRITE LIKE THAT.oh ya and the start will be explaned later ok.

[Edited on 10-3-2006 by axl z]

[Edited on 10-3-2006 by axl z]

shud up this aint spam this was requested.good job,ok

Your \"editor\" wanted you to type like crap..?

well...the grammer needs some work no offense and some editing but it was ok

....your editor?

Spider-Man wears his costume underneath his clothes, you know. He wouldn\'t have to put his costume on.

Okay, I see I\'m going to need to go over the basics. First off, paragraphs are your friend, although this was so short that it would be almost hard to break up. So I move on to a pointer- capitalize the beginnings of sentances, and people\'s names and such. I can\'t believe I actually have to say that. -_-; No offense, but if you\'re going to write something for other people to read, you need to put an effort into making it <i>legible.</i>

Also, stick with <i>one type</i> of writing; you went from past tense to present tense to first person... Be consistant. Also, this wasn\'t much of an intro; it was way too short, and practically incomprensible. Make sure to describe the situation and the area. And for all that\'s good and sane, put quotation marks around the dialogue, man! I don\'t know who your \"editor\" is, but having an editor who\'s as much of an amatuer at writing as you are doesn\'t help anything at all!

-Ri

Ill tell my editer that.part two will be up tonight.

[Edited on 11-3-2006 by axl z]

sounds good axl cant wait for it im delighted

part 2
This fight starts with no words just fists.Spiderman jups up and trows a punch At venom.Venom grabs it and throws him up five storys.Toxin grabs carnage and swings him around and sets him down.\"you dont get it mannn were here to help you\"said carnage\"YA ILL BE.........GAAAAAA\"Carnage stabed him in the gut and pulled it out.\"AA my head venom throw me hard\"\"MISS USSSSSSS!!!!\"no i dident you think this is fun you could have\" BAM! \"NIGHT NIGHT\"
Spiderman was down and so was toxin.Blood was evry where this CLEAN UP crew comes to take the bodey but problom there are no bodys.

[Edited on 11-3-2006 by axl z]

[Edited on 11-3-2006 by axl z]

ummm yeah.....EDITING

Im talking to him.

A couple more tips; use a spellchecker. Just type it up in a word program or something and copy and past it here. Second, when someone new speaks, start a new paragraph. For the record, your grammar is so garbaled that I can barely understand what\'s going on.

-Ri

Ok im writeing this my why not my editers.

that made no since and neither does your sig.

OK you ill tell what happens but your writeing then me brother.

sure brother,im always willing to help

Evry thing will be explaned iv been up all night fixing this guys paper.