The Anime is Called Human Sin.




Humans (obviously): Well, there\'s not much to explain here except that they are an
experiment created by the Nu Terrans to simulate possible courses of Evolution
that may have been taken in the development of Nu Terrans.


Nu Terrans: This is the godlike race which created humans in order to simulate the
development of the Nu Terrans, which are in fact, a much more advanced form of
Humans who have emerged from the same genetic history.
<Also, I understand that this may be a corny way to explain why all the humanoid
races in the story can speak English, but the Nu Terrans influence everything
about the Media, and the history of the Humans...including religion, god-worship,
popular believe, philosophy, math development, and just about everything about
human, to mirror how their own civilization developed (also an experiment to see
if time would take the same course as it did with the Nu Terrans)...does that seem
corny?>


Valiants: Ok, here\'s where Sci Fi and Fantasy merge. The Valiants were a type of
race discovered on the home planet of the Nu Terrans <now dubbed as the Nties for
now>. They have the power to merge with Nu Terrans and humans (symbiotes anyone?)
and generate unbelievable amounts of Energy. In order to utilize the Valiants to
their maximum potential, the Nu Terrans developed special Armor called the Valiant
Shrikes, which give the users unbelievable physical abilities. The thing about the Valiants is that they don’t have any form of physical shape. They do not have matter even (unless you count the photons that they give off). They are a form of pure energy, but so complex, that they have developed a form of consciousness. They are sentient beings. Their true purpose…I can’t tell you. Buuuuut….they play a major role in the story.







Back Drop


The basic story of Human Sin is that the Nu Terrans don’t want to destroy the planet out right. Since the planet was terra formed, they really didn’t feel like blowing it up just to stop a science experiment gone wrong. Instead, they have resorted to wiping out the entire human race through extermination.

This is where the Valiant Shrikes play into it.

5 Valiant Shrikes are sent as an advance force to 5 majorly populated areas. However, for some unexplained reason, an Elite, which is a very powerful commander in the Nu Terran extermination squad, was sent with the Commander Valiant, and ambushed the Val as he was sailing over South Carolina, America. They both crash into a high School called WeiCon high. The Elite somehow injures the V-Shrike, and the Nu Terran residing within it is forced to evac. the Valiant, to find a more suitable host while the core armor that channels the Valiants full power self destructs

(I’m gonna put some tech in here later)
BOOM.

Ok, so, the valiant is frantically searching for a host while the elite is searching through the school, caring little for the destruction it causes, the Valiant finds a powerful aura with which it can safely bond with
(I’ll also put some interesting bit of tech in here later….or something philosophical…I don’t know).

Anyway, the Valiant merges with said Aura, who turns out to be the main character of the series: Kyuukyoku Hateru (I’ll explain the quirky meaning of the name later)



There\'s gonna be more...let me know what you think.

[Edited on 26-11-2003 by Keiyoushi_Naota]

Cool. Looks like it would be a good series. You should submit your idea to a company or something. YOU COULD BE RICH!! If you did get rich, you\'d send me money, right?! PLEASE?!

It sounds gooud to me. The merging thing may be a little cliche\' though. Everyone merges now. Dragonball Z, Zoids, and Digimon series 4 doesn\'t even have partners! All they do is merge.

Anyways, I like most of it so far. If you wanted a ground braking FLCL type anime, I\'d give it some humerous characters. For me, too much drama spoils the broth.

yeah, you\'re probbaly right.

But it\'s not necessarily Merging per se, because he can remove the Valiant at any time...

Anyway...Who else thinks it\'s good/bad/ok/whatever?

rI Know this could be a good breakthoght but still, i am you worst nightmare...:devil:

[Edited on 13-12-2003 by Mega Master Cutman]

Look...you are spamming....

Try making a topic that is actually LEGIBLE!!!!!


God...anyway...I\'ve been busy as of late, so no new stuff...but it\'s coming...

(laugh)

Well...my mind is always coming up with brand spanking new ideas....I just haven\'t put them into digital form yet...

Valiants have concious minds right? You should write it out as novel, with each chapter being an episode. Publish it on Fanfiction.net\'s sister site. Fictionpress.net. Full o\' Crap it is, but there are things that you have to put up with.


You should make ther first few episode where the guy fights with his VAliant Partner

1. Yes, they are sentient.
2. Hmm...maybe.
3. Not gonna happen. The first episode is meant to introduce readers (viewers) to the main character, and explain WHY he has a valiant, to get questions started.

In a sense, the original valiant owner will be doing battle with an Elite.

The Elite wins, and the armor detonates, with the pilot inside, but the valiant residing in the armor moves to a new host (hence the main character)...

I think I might call the Valiant: Kei (punishment)

Ahhh, now THAT\'S a good story line...because...it\'s not as if Kyuu has a choice in the whole bonding thing anyway...

thanks friend!!

Then, he might experience it first-hand and change his mind.

sounds good. A little confusing thogh.

It\'s gona have blood,gore,action,and a hot chick right?????????

.- makes a good point. Will there be violence, cool action sequences, and a hot anime girl?:D

Ok, here\'s the first ...page of the first chapter/episode...Obviously...it\'s not done...but tell me what you think...

...read it ya\'ll.

Nu? Godlike race? Oh that sounds so familiar to Chrono Trigger.

I liked it, could I offer you some advice though?

There is a novel of the Game Chrono Cross, I trust you\'ve played it? Read it, and see how he uses descriptive words, and how his plot thickens and the characters are explored in depth


http://www.angelfire.com/gundam/bb2k/ccross/sj-top.htm

Well, that was great! Forget what I said before about the cheesy fusion thing, I\'m convinced that you can pull it off without it being too streotypical.

The only problem I can see is that the word \'however\' is used twice in a row in the first paragraph, which cuts off the flow of the words. It should be no problem to fix though, right?

Ahhh...good point.
Anyway, stupid final exams...I have to study.

Any ideas for characters though? Like names...cause I come up with crappy names.

I\'m not any better. \'Cept my main character I got a good name for him, Serge...what?

[quote]Originally posted by Mega Master Cutman
rI Know this could be a good breakthoght but still, i am you worst nightmare...:devil:

[Edited on 13-12-2003 by Mega Master Cutman] [/quote]

Seriously, can\'t you EVER post anything topic related, wich actually makes SENSE??! (sorry for the overstressed word, but that little blue idiot really frustrates me. And I\'m in a bad mood.) You\'re no ones nightmare, you\'re some 10-year old AOL kid pretending to be someone\'s nightmare.

Anyway, I like the story, you\'ve done a good job making that up, but... How about the art? Did you allready draw some characters? If so, I\'m aching to see them!

I hear that ya\'ll.

Annnd...no...I suck at drawing.

Make sure you get a japanese theme song, those are good

yeah, I was going to try and get the Pillows signed...but it needs to be something great before that.

Episode/Chapter 1: \"On the Sixth Day, God created Man\"


\"It says in the bible of the humans that God created the earth and all it\'s animals in Five days. However, on the sixth day, God created man.
However, in the bible of the wise, a 2nd being existed. A being that was spoken to have strange and mystical powers. A being so great, it could make mountains tremble before it\'s great might. For millennia, we have pressed onward and onward, seeking out this being. For you see, the streak of curiosity so deeply embedded in the Human psyche was not an accident. It was a mark of the conceit and the megalomaniac behaviors that we ourselves exhibit.\"


The day was cold, with a cloud of delusion hanging close overhead. In the distance, the great metal monster loomed ever longer, forever placing in our minds it\'s greatness. Reminding us constantly, that it was there, and we could do nothing about it. They say on clear nights like this, it\'s great energy pulls stars to the ground.
Nonsense if you ask me.
It is this very \'monster\' that gives us the power to commune with the rest of the world. For you see, we are merely the vegetables of a stew, contained in the great pot of the mountains. But I\'m being stupid. Surrounding our fair city are great and looming mountains. There is no way around them. There is no way through them. The only way is over them.
In the distance, you could hear the screams of countless lives being lost. Lives that we so painfully remember, as we fled from their destruction. What cowards we are. This world we live on, it is nothing. It is forever closed to us. So, naturally, the people pretend it doesn’t exist.
Brilliant if you ask me.
As I said, The day was cold, with a cloud of delusion hanging close overhead. Suddenly, the world isn\'t so bad. The world that can not be a world at all is not so bad. A great light intrudes on my life, only to be the love of my life. The light of my soul.
My girlfriend, Jana.
“Kyuu…what are you doing standing by the window?”
I looked up in alarm as I realized that my reverie of presumed depression was shattered as Jana sat down next to me.
“You look so lonely, sitting here by the window...” said she.
“I’m fine…just…gazing at the stars.”
“Stars that aren’t really there…”
Heh. Stars that were never there. I said before that we’re merely a stew, simmering in the mountains of this world. Surrounded by darkness, and almost cut off from humanity, we’re coming to a boil. The dome that shields and protects us is suffocating us. Ironic. The very thing designed to preserve us is slowly gnawing away at our humanity.
“Kyuu?” Once again, I find myself horrible interrupted…but then, that’s why I like Jana.
“Huh? Oh, I’m sorry Jana. I didn’t realize I was zoning out again,” Boy…how could she put up with me? “So what can I do for you?”
“Well…I wanted to go somewhere. To…”
“Yes?”
“I wanted to go to the-” I hope she doesn’t say it… “Pinnacle”
The Pinnacle is what all the adults here call the bane of our existence. The very thing giving that oversized pot-cover the energy it needs. But, when you go to the top, it doesn’t seem so bad. As if, all the dreary gloom that’s settled on this town is heavier than air . . . that it doesn’t reach such an altitude . . .









I realize I haven\'t gotten much done...but tell me what you think.